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Hey! So I've been working on the common app honors and activities section, trying to make myself appear as a committed leader without making any complete lies. I was wondering if you could read over what i wrote and tell me if it looks solid or what parts seem suspicious or read as BS to you. Sorry I know this is a very long post.

Honors
"If you have received any honors beginning with the ninth grade or international equivalent, please indicate number of honors: 5 (the highest option allowed on the common app)
Honors 1 title: Platinum Honors. Grade level 9. Highest level of recognition: School
Honors 2 title: Academic Achievement Award. Grade level 10. Level of rec: School
Honors 3 title: IASAS, Selected for International Basketball Competition. G10. International
Honors 4 title: U.S. History World Cup Contender. Grade level 10. Level of rec: School
Honors 5 title: Academic Letter. Grade level 11, 12. Highest level of recognition: School

Activities in order of importance
1. Science/Math. Position/Leadership: Math Club Lead, JSHS and SNHS
Participation grade levels: 9, 10, 11, 12. I intend to participate while in college: Yes
Timing of participation: School. Hours spent per week: 5. Weeks spent per year: 24
Details, honors, and accomplishments: won second place in regional Math Club Competition
2. Theater/Drama. Lead Actor, Sound Technician, Writer and Director. grades 9, 10, 11, 12
I intend to participate while in college: Yes. Timing of participation: School
Hours spent per week 10. Weeks spent per year 16. Details: Lead Actor of four school plays, won Most Creative Improv, gave work shop on Boleslavsky, wrote and directed a school play that won Audience Favorite
3. Community Service (Volunteer). H4H Lead, Assistant Teacher, Coach and Referee.
Participation grade levels: 9, 10, 11, 12. I intend to participate while in college: Yes
Timing of participation: Year. Hours spent per week: 4. Weeks spent per year: 15
H4H Team raised over $10,000 for cement and bricks; Middle School basketball team I coached won first place in region
4. Athletics: JV/Varsity. Basketball. Starter. Grades 9, 10.
I intend to participate while in college: Yes. Timing of participation: School
Hours spent per week: 10. Weeks spent per year: 24
Won first place in ISAC regional competition; Lead scorer for Basketball Exchange
5. Computer/Technology. Robotics Sumo Wrestling Team Captain. grades 10, 11, 12
I intend to participate while in college: No. Timing of participation: School.
Hours spent per week: 3. Weeks spent per year: 24.
Won local robot sumo wrestling competition, joined Dead Robot Society in 12th grade
6. Student Govt./Politics. Class President. grade 9
I intend to participate while in college: No. Timing of participation: School
Hours spent per week: 2. Weeks spent per year: 35
I helped plan school events and organize fundraisers
7. Work (Paid). U.S. Embassy in Kuala Lumpur Summer Intern. Summer before grade 11.
I intend to participate while in college: No. 45 Hours spent per week. 8 Weeks per year
I completed a program in cyber security.
8. Other Club/Activity. Forensics, International Club, NHS, Writer for Take. grades 11, 12.
I intend to participate while in college: No. Timing of participation: School.
Hours spent per week: 3. Weeks spent per year: 15.
I continued writing for the student magazine Take in Malaysia even after moving to the United States.
9. JV/Varsity. Track and field. High Jumper and Sprinter. Grade 12.
I intend to participate while in college: No. Timing of participation: School
Hours spent per week: 10. Weeks spent per year: 15.
I plan on trying out for my schools track team.


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Then on the writing sections for Additional Information I wrote:
"Brief explanation on honors and activities
IASAS: Competition where select students from international schools in Southeast Asia compete.
U.S. History World Cup Contender: the best History students from my school are selected to compete for the History World Cup trophy.
Academic Achievement Award, Platinum Honors, and Academic Letter: given to students based on academic performance.
JSHS: Junior Science and Humanities Symposium - I was going to compete in Japan but it was cancelled due to the Earthquake.
SNHS: Science National Honors Society.
Theater: I plan to participate in college by auditioning for school plays.
Basketball: I plan to participate in college in intramural/club basketball.
Assistant Teacher: for Sunday School.
H4H: Habitat for Humanity, where through various activities like golf tournaments, book sales, flea markets, and two 40 hour famines, we raised over $10,000 for cement and bricks to help build homes for those in need.
Additions to my application that I'm sending include a science experiment proposition paper and a peer recommendation."

Thoughts?